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My name is javad, javad Tavakoli. I am Iranian from Boroujen, a small mountainous city in Ch. &.B. I was born 27 years ago at the Shariati Hospital in Isfahan. I lived in Boroujen until 18 years old. I have been married but unfortunately I haven’t any child. I graduated from Petroleum University of technology in B.Sc. of process safety and have master degree in the same field from University of Environment. I used to play volleyball but I am just jugging. Esteghlal is my favorite team and I really like Naser Hejazi. More leisure time of mine has been full by learning and doing sport recently.
In 2012 when I was a mere 18 years old boy I was accepted for Abadan Institute of Technology and a new life routes was opened for me. I studied 4 years in process safety and loss prevention in Abadan, I fallen in love in this city and the best day of my life was passed there. After undergraduate study, I decided to find a new way with more challenges. Therefore I intended to go away and go on learning in a bigger city. I was accepted as a 5th men in chemical Engineering master examination so that I could educate in Tehran. The master education was very lighting for me. I could publish the first book in inherently safer process design in Iran and more than 10 article of mine were pressed. I was as an editor in two international conference and was introduced to two most significant people in my life Dr. Sarkheil and Dr. Yazdian. Generally I didn’t used to have free study but scientific finding out is incredibly my favorite. Process safety and loss prevention, inherently safer design and facilities lay out are the most important topic for me. I think I will be one of five top person of this field in the world. Inherently safer design concentrate on prevention engineering and this approach can be challenged any person.
I don’t really have a wonderful sport duration all proud of mine was just playing in colleague’s team and small local team but on the whole I have love volleyball extremely since I was a small kid. Ney and Tonbak are my interested musical instruments and I prefer classical music to other type. I am always in diet but I have never said no to sweet food.
When we had accepted as a student in PUT all of us were funded by ministry of petroleum and we thought that all the world was emphasis to this fact. But when Zangane Eng. Was appointed as a minister he said that “ I didn’t need to you “ this sentence could have destroyed life of more than 1500 people may also have done, but that’s time we found out that this country isn’t for us. Learning English and immigration may as well be the just way we could have. So that we have been trying for a new life… .
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ujen, a small mountainous city in Ch. &.B. I was born 27 years ago at the Shariat...
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...go at the Shariati Hospital in Isfahan. I lived in Boroujen until 18 years old. I...
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...I lived in Boroujen until 18 years old. I have been married but unfortunately I h...
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...unfortunately I haven't any child. I graduated from Petroleum University of ...
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...Petroleum University of technology in B.Sc. of process safety and have master degr...
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...o find a new way with more challenges. Therefore I intended to go away and go on learnin...
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... a bigger city. I was accepted as a 5th men in chemical Engineering master examinat...
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...process design in Iran and more than 10 article of mine were pressed. I was as an edito...
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...r me. I think I will be one of five top person of this field in the world. Inherently ...
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... approach can be challenged any person. I don't really have a wonderful spo...
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...hat we have been trying for a new life… .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, i think, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 24.0651302605 258% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 498.0 315.596192385 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52409638554 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76201600552 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 176.041082164 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506024096386 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.2363971685 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6896551724 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1724137931 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65517241379 7.06120827912 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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