The most practical and effective way to protect wilderness areas is to attract more tourists to these areas through environmentally sensitive projects
The protected wilderness areas like national parks and protected areas could be the very fragile and sensitive areas that might need a lot of money to recover them again. On the other hand, these areas have the high potential of investing money to attract more people to these areas. In my opinion, attracting more tourists and visitors to the wilderness areas could have some negative consequences including damaging the unique and natural areas and changing the behavior of wild animals.
First of all, environmental habitats are so fragile to the construction projects and the projects that these areas need to change for attracting new visitors. Attracting new visitors and tourists to the national parks and protected areas might need some construction including building restaurants, restrooms, ways, and streets, therefore, these kinds of construction might have face the natural and unique environment to the new stresses and issues that could have negative and significant effects on the health of environments. For instance, in my country one of the most famous national parks for attracting more visitors is Golestan national parks that in the first days of openings it has plenty of unique wild animals and specious of planet like Lichens, however, after 10 years all kinds of lichen completely destroyed and extinct in this environment because of the construction projects and building many restaurants and hotels there. Therefore, investing in the national parks and natural environment for making more money might have some negative consequences because of too much construction.
In addition, the existence of too many tourists and visitors to the natural environments could have negative effects on the behavior of the unique specious or lead them to extinction. It is crystal clear that the existence of the tourists and visitors in the natural parks and protected areas could make the wild animals shy and change their regular behavior. For instance, there are many national parks in Africa and have plenty of visitors in the year and cause the significant change in the behavior of the wild animals like lions, horses, and giraffes. Because visitors sometimes try to take a photo or feed them, make the animals more imitate and motivated to change their habitats or behavior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 380, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'faced'.
Suggestion: faced
... these kinds of construction might have face the natural and unique environment to t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28882833787 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75667993737 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 215.323595506 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.389645776567 0.4932671777 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.2243301558 60.3974514979 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.454545455 118.986275619 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3636363636 23.4991977007 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 5.21951772744 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285356460539 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132634598891 0.0831039109588 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974905622153 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224282951083 0.150359130593 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130079706841 0.0667264976115 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 14.1392134831 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.8420337079 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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