Teachers play an important rule at our society. Nowadays, we have a huge number of teachers at many schools and universities. Some people believe that teacher were more respected and valued at the past more than today. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that teachers and professors in that moment are totally appreciated all over the world more than before for two reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, teacher can travel abroad to participate in new learning technology to improve their knowledge. Recently, there are many advanced technology in schools and many teacher prefer to use these modern ways to benefit their students. For example, my brother is studying in medical school at Japan. He told me that his teachers traveled to United States last summer to attend conference called the American Academy. In addition, he explains that all teachers will learn how to install experiment in the local lab at schools by themselves. Also, they can demonstrate all of these knowledge in front of students. As a result, they expand their horizon. In addition, they can gain new experience from this new manner of teaching. This experience taught me that teachers are highly appreciated from many aspects. On the other hand, teacher in the past could not have this opportunity and they are just sticky to the old way.
In addition, the government increased the salaries for many teachers to motivate them. Nowadays, many teachers can get very respectful salary and they can live the life that they always dreamed off. For instance, my uncle's experience is a compelling example. My uncle is working as a teacher in high school. His salary was so bad last 5 years. Furthermore, he was working without any benefit such as medical insurance or any sick leaves. However, last year the government put new regulations for the teachers. For example, they increased the salary rate by ten percent, all teachers have one month vacation for the whole year, and all teachers have a medical coverage. As a result, they became so motivated and my uncle would be able to buy new house in a big town. Furthermore, he became so motivated and he can do his best to help students. This is because he feels that he highly appreciated from the board of education. As you can see, right now, teachers can enjoy their work and they can benefit from their jobs more than the past.
In sum, I strongly believe that teachers are highly appreciated in these days more than the last decay. This is because, teachers have many chances to improve their skills as they can travel abroad to learn new experience, and because the government increased their salaries. Also, I highly recommend that the government should keep this way of motivation for all teachers because teachers play very critical role in our community.
- TOEFL T P O 34 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun teacher seems to be countable; consider using: 'many teachers'.
Suggestion: many teachers
...many advanced technology in schools and many teacher prefer to use these modern ways to bene...
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Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l experiment in the local lab at schools by themselves. Also, they can demonstrat...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'these knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; these knowledges
...lves. Also, they can demonstrate all of these knowledge in front of students. As a result, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2363.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90248962656 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60616011723 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470954356846 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4235306617 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4827586207 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6206896552 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48275862069 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166500530623 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497308309853 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468797337764 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123960276073 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458085126532 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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