Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level.
Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued by some people that extra-curricular subjects comprising music,art and theatre are as crucial as the core subjects like mathematics and social science, more specifically at an elementary level of schooling. This essay completely agrees with the statement because these subjects can help in the overall development of young children and can work as a pathway to a successful career in these areas.
During the fundamentals years of schooling, children require a curriculum full of subjects that cater to the need for the overall development of young masses. This is so because intellectual and creative potentials of young masses can only be developed if these disciplines are made a vital part of the schedule in all educational institutions. For example, a recent survey conducted on students from grade one to five by the W.H.O. revealed that those who were exposed to creative subjects Arts ,singing or dancing turned out to be more balanced personalities ,emotionally and cognitively after five years than the ones who were deprived of the knowledge of these subjects.
Moreover, these subjects can be chosen to establish a successful career in the future. In other words,this concept can lead to a world not just dominated by mathematicians, scientists, journalists and doctors but also singers, dancers, actors, painters and musicians. This is why an increasing number of people are seen to be opting arts and theatre as their profession owing to the interest developed by them during their elementary years at school. For example , Adele , a world famous singer and lyricist had been exposed to performing arts as a subject in her school which has become one of the reasons behind her tremendous success.
In conclusion, theatre, art and music have exactly the same value as science and maths since education with holistic perspective give birth to fully developed personalities and these programs can work as a career pathways for budding professionals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 76, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , art
...tra-curricular subjects comprising music,art and theatre are as crucial as the core ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...o were exposed to creative subjects Arts ,singing or dancing turned out to be more...
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Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ed out to be more balanced personalities ,emotionally and cognitively after five y...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...ful career in the future. In other words,this concept can lead to a world not just do...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... elementary years at school. For example , Adele , a world famous singer and lyric...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ary years at school. For example , Adele , a world famous singer and lyricist had ...
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Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'pathway'?
Suggestion: pathway
...and these programs can work as a career pathways for budding professionals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27215189873 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04531782938 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588607594937 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.3191368784 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.6 106.682146367 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106664630789 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406761193397 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403762441412 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0670148266495 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032913977287 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.