maps Cambridge 12 test 6 task 1

The two maps describe conditions of the central of a small town named Islip, recently and its change in the future.

There will be a massive development of Islip in some area especially in shops area and countryside. Islip has two large shops area between the main road in the middle of the city central in present. In the future, the shops area in north side will be replaced to be a bus station, a shopping centre, and a car park. They will be placed in the west side, and in another side there will be a new housing area. In addition, the main road is going to be renovated as a pedestrian.

Another massive development planning is for the countryside, that will be replaced to be a big road with dual carriageway. The road will be laid around the city central. There are some areas in Islis without a meaning maintenance in the future, as showed in the sketchs, such as school, park, and housing area in south side. A school will be quite renovated, and the park is going to be a little bit smaller. There will be an increasing number of housing, from two to four housing areas.

Overall, Islip will be looked different in the future, there are a huge development and renovation for some areas, and an increasing number of building, although a few areas will be the same.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shops'' or 'shop's'?
Suggestion: shops'; shop's
... central in present. In the future, the shops area in north side will be replaced to ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...enovated, and the park is going to be a little bit smaller. There will be an increasing nu...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1051.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 234.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49145299145 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55174014127 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470085470085 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 330.3 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.482926829268 1035% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2501864276 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5833333333 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.23603664747 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00969154908964 0.215688989381 4% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00561963124523 0.103423049105 5% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0186382083006 0.0843802449381 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0168588937357 0.15604864568 11% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292004605096 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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