IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:1. Explain why you are interested in helping2. give details suitable past experience3. suggest ways you might help with the eventWrite at least 150 words.

Submitted by VK_IELTS on Tue, 08/07/2018 - 09:17

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in response to the advertisement for ‘a volunteer to help run a charity event’ in the Sunday Observer, last week.

I am un university student, and I have been working with different charity events since my school time. I have a proper understanding of why people need helps since some of my friends and relatives were affected by the Tsunami disaster in 2004. I was very young at that time, and I could not do much for them. However, I did my best, and always I remember those people when there is a disaster in the country. I help people and pray for my relatives and friends whose I have lost from natural disasters.

I have experience in coordinating the charity events. For example, I have arranged to distribute books and clothes to children who were affected by the Aranayaka landslide. Most of the people were displaced, and they were in camps, schools or a temple. I was able to donate all collected items, without any favoritism or discrimination.

I might be able to help to coordinate and lead a subcommittee of your charity project. Moreover, I may able to collect more people for this event since I have contact with people who are interested in charity programs.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,
VK

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nt charity events since my school time. I have a proper understanding of why peop...
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Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...fected by the Tsunami disaster in 2004. I was very young at that time, and I coul...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1075.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 223.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82062780269 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86721421804 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587443946188 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 340.2 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2884509122 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7857142857 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9285714286 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 4.34317383033 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153425646233 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494078685778 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450161700969 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963398229083 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05215945009 0.0580467560999 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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