The violence portrayed on TV and in movies leads to an increase in crime in our society. People who watch violent movies are more likely to become criminals. Do you agree or disagree?
It goes without saying that what is seen on tv and movies would greatly influence us. But what if this influence violence! Could this violence impact our values, behaviours, and our society? I am going to discuss from my point of view the idea that people who watch violent movies are likely to become criminals
We could not ignore the increase in crime rates during the past ten years, which most of them had been done by adolescents, some of them kill their families and the others kill their friends. Most investigations refer to the fact that most of those criminal teenagers were playing violent video games, which includes killing and shooting fire on civilians. Scientists discover that the subconscious of our brain stores all violent images and acts and restore them during the real life, so the reactions would be unintentionally violent.
however,some researchers made their studies on the human brain and reached to the fact that some people are not affected by violent and aggressive scenes according to real experiments, while others are ready to be violent by nature.
Moreover, the violence existed in the tiniest details of our children's lives. Specifically, in TOM and Jerry programme; the famous animation that children and adults watch since 50 years ago; which includes tons of violence that make kids stressed and nervous against their colleagues.
To sum up, violent movies surely lead to aggressive behaviour for kids and adults according to psychologists who assured the importance of the psychological health of people. People in charge must put regulations on violent movies and reduce the quantity of aggression and violent on TV as much as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 5.05154639175 297% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.03092783505 396% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 26.3917525773 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 937.175257732 151% => OK
No of words: 275.0 206.0 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15272727273 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72733090847 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596363636364 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 290.88556701 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 16.3608247423 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.6351868847 44.8134815571 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.7 76.5299724578 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 16.8248392259 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 4.34317383033 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.49484536082 468% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267964824666 0.216113520407 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974863522876 0.0766984524023 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510277479901 0.0603063233224 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136110247552 0.12726935374 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865104804044 0.0580467560999 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 8.37731958763 198% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 7.45979381443 169% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 8.71597938144 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 41.2886597938 179% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 8.54432989691 150% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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