There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heared everywhere nowadays?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant ex

It is no doubt that in this world, different countries have their own types of music. Music is a magic and acts as a miracle in our lives. Some people prefer traditional music while other argue about the importance of international music. In Nepal, younger generations prefer modern music but some of them and older people are eager to save their traditional music. Thus, the importance of conventional music over the international music is discussed along with my opinion.

To begin with, music is a life and acts as divine force among people. Music puts in different moods and frame over our minds. For instance, listening music during exercise boosts our minds and brings passion on sports. Furthermore, it breaks monotonous of life and recharges our batteries. Apart from that, music has various genres and lyrics which help them to differentiate from one country to another.

On the one hand, traditional music is popular and an ancient mode of interpretation which have been transferred from one generation to next generation. In addition to it, it is an integral part of the human expression that is inseparable from culture and dignity of the country. As evidenced by descendants will able to learn history, culture and tradition of the country. In addition to it, it is positive influence in terms of emotion and experience. Moreover, it also helps to get idea about indigenous practices and remarks legacy from our ancestors.

On the other hand, modern foreign music have been popular among people nowadays due to rapid development of the technology. Moreover, teenagers follow their own trends and music and are more devoted towards modern music rather than country's music. Thus, people are forgetting their own values and norms. However, the traditional music shows lifestyles and origin of the country.

Secondly, in the materialistic world, people are influenced by western music. This type of music are really fun and catchy type and people usually enjoy this type of music for dancing in parties. such music are commercially produced and marketed by business men to earn profit. in contrast, folk music provides culture identity which is necessary to distinguish from other country.Moreover, it connects person from past to present situation

In conclusion, music refreshes and inspires ourselves. As music depends upon moods, age and psychological impact, people like to hear different types of music, especially young people prefer to listen an international music. Nevertheless, it is better to encourage youngsters to save traditional music which inspires, impresses us and explains untold story of country.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, thus, while, apart from, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29285714286 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87010057738 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521428571429 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3191649178 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.92 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.67935871743 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430770455159 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139261316818 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981832877669 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258883509572 0.151304729494 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107283167532 0.056905535591 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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