TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

For the rapid and high-competitive development of modern society, most parents are busy with their jobs instead of their children. Throughout the last decades, a significant amount of children merely has less time to be with their parents. In 2017, the University of Cambridge surveyed 1,000 families in London, and it just placed a question:” How many times do you spend with your children a week?” Over 65% of people said they only had a day that could accompany their children. This survey indicated a sad social phenomenon - our families today are unfortunate.

How well hardness this treasured time being with kids seems like a thorny question and sturdy enough to make a perfect answer. There’s an argument about the selection of ways to spend time with children. Some voices claim that using this pressured time to have joy with their children, like playing games or something else, is a right way for each; otherwise, others argue it is better to do something relevant to schoolwork. In my opinion, I approve parents should share the time on fun stuff with kids rather than doing something related to school. Because homework cannot shape a person’s life; it is not the only way for people to get wisdom.

Childhood is so short compared with human lifespan. Meanwhile, it does not make sense for parents to waste their family time merely functioning on the schoolwork. Instead, they should build premium memories for their kids in their childhood, like hiking, playing games, and maybe fishing together. Due to these kinds of accompanying behaviors, children could naturally receive the love from their parents; otherwise, these non-utilitarian manner is beneficial to build their self-esteem and self-worth, vital for a fulfilling life. For example, parents spend all their spare time playing board games with kids instead of working with the homework, during this gaming time, children could genuinely enjoy this amusement without under any pressure from school work. As a result, throughout the gaming time, children could communicate well with their parents expressing themselves confidently and comfortably; otherwise, it is an excellent opportunity for parents to teach them to understand, that knowledge does exist anywhere instead of studying in school - gaming could also offer a window for them to chase the wisdom. As Richelle E. Goodrich said, “Life is a puzzle, a riddle, a test, a mystery, a game—whatever challenge you wish to compare it to.”

Furthermore, Tiger Mom is a terrible social problem in China. For this unusual epidemic phenomena, most parents in China merely focus on the results from children’s studies. The reason for them to do anything with kids is in their studies. But schoolwork is not a central value for humans; it would cause horrible consequences for children, like suicide. Four years ago, two young people decided to end their lives and jumped down from my apartment’s rooftop. If parents choose to only focus on schoolwork, it means they are not only hurting kids’ growth and destroying their lives as well.

After analyzing various factors, I believe, having fun together and making quality time with children is vital for each family and a right way for them to have a healthy family dynamic and happy kids.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he wisdom. As Richelle E. Goodrich said, 'Life is a puzzle, a riddle, a test...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, well, while, for example, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2784.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22326454034 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85108067554 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547842401501 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 829.8 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.3703646764 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.043478261 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1739130435 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280421393477 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088226378116 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699980611674 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177378553804 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681520420287 0.0645574589148 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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