In the given letter from the faculty committee to the President of Seatown University, claims are made about a study that was conducted at another nearby University named Oceania University. Per committee, Oceania University has a high faculty retention, the reason being their professors are lured with free tuition for their college-aged children at the University itself. So, the committee insists on following a similar practice in Seatown University as well where a free-tuition policy should be initiated. The committee claims that this will not only enhance the morale of the faculty but also help in luring new professors into the University.
The claims made in the above statement are obscure and lack substantial grounds. A cohesive approach is required to analyse the given statement and demands varied evidences to support the same.
First, the study conducted at the Oceania University doesn't talk about numbers, how many professors participated in the study? What is the time period when the study was conducted? Was it sooner or way back in time? How many professors in the University actually had college-aged children? how many were actually using the free-tuition policy granted by the University? All these questions need a viable answer to warrant the above statement.
Also, the faculty committee claims that a free-tuition policy should be instituted in Seatown University without giving the enumeration of professors who actually have college-going children? It is possible that only a small proportion of the faculty working at Seatown University has college-going children and rest have small kids, are single or have kids who are already married. Hence, the faculty as a whole won't be benefitted much from such a policy.
Moreover, the committee doesn't talk anything about the scope of the free-tuition policy. How is it going to benefit the college-going children of the faculty members? Will tuitions be provided for all subjects or only a bunch of them? Who will be delivering the lectures? Will these tuitions provide quality-study hours or will be considered forsakenly?
Another question that the faculty needs to address is who is going to incur the costs of this free-tuition policy? Will the University take charge of the entire project? And since some people will definitely be deployed to provide tuitions to these children, who will be responsible to pay them for working extra hours? The entire plot of the policy needs to be examined carefully before rolling out such a practise.
Hence, clearly the given claims demand some serious attention to questions raised above and a proper formulation and discussion needs to be undertaken before culminating to such a policy. It needs to be examined if this policy can really boost professors morale and lure new professors or is it just a flowery deal resulting in no good returns.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
need to argue according to the topic. more arguments wanted for:
'...for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2365 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.097 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.819 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.56 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.516 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.36 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 54, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...udy conducted at the Oceania University doesnt talk about numbers, how many professors...
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Line 4, column 291, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...ity actually had college-aged children? how many were actually using the free-tuiti...
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Line 8, column 25, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...h a policy. Moreover, the committee doesnt talk anything about the scope of the fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2422.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25379609544 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87838190923 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468546637744 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6553357341 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1538461538 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7307692308 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353495084671 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988635963005 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105037040541 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166394934405 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157598604875 0.0628817314937 251% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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