agree or disagree? in the past, people depended on their parents to make decision but now people do not rely on their parents very much.
The speed of different changes in the world is really high, and there is nothing which has not gone under these changes. One of the most important changes in the recent decades is the way which people make their decisions. Although still people ask for the opinion of experienced people to make the best choices, most of the youth rely on themselves and try to obey their own thoughts. In my view, nowadays, young people do not rely on older as much as the past, and I will elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, in the past, people were not highly educated, and as a result, they were dependent on older to make decisions. Academic education can really help people to consider different aspects of each point and make better choices, but is was like this in the past, and people used to ask older. By increase of the level of people's knowledge, their dependence on experienced people decreases and their can stand on their own feet. As an example, I can mention my father and myself. Every time I face to a problem, I try to google about it and think about different ways to deal with it by my own. I am sure it is all due to my academic education which gave me this self confidence that I can overcome almost all my problems without asking other for a help. On the other hand, my father always tries to ask the opinion of his father and uses his precious experiences. In my view, the different life style my father and I have can prove why I think people with higher education level ask less for help and rely on themselves more.
Second, nowadays, Internet and news resources make people aware of whats going on around them and help them to make good decisions without relying on others. By having a glance at just some internet pages, people can easily obtain all the information they need for making decisions, and it highly decline their dependence on others. However, it was not the same in the past, and people used to ask to experience and knowledge of others that can help them for fulfilling their goals. My own life experience is a compelling example of this point. Last year, I faced to a problem in my job, and I had a limited time to solve it. My mother told me to ask others for a help, but I believed on the power of Internet and preferred to just google about it. Just one hour later, I found the solution, and it could really make me satisfied. In my eyes, although older would rather asking others when they cope with their problems, nowadays' people just prefer to use search engines, and easily obtain the answers by their own.
To sum up, most of the time, asking others, especially experienced ones, helps people to reach solutions in a fast and safe way, but these days prefer to deal with their problems by their own. Academic educations which give wide range of knowledge to people, and the presence of tons of internet-base data cites could highly decrease the dependence of people to older. Based on these justifications, my conviction is that today, people would rather no to ask for a help or advise, when they deal with a problem.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
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Message: Did you mean 'declines'?
Suggestion: declines
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'ask'
Suggestion: ask
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, i think, as a result, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 52.1666666667 171% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2547.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 562.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53202846975 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4299776966 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432384341637 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 13.0 1.86738351254 696% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6172630526 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.739130435 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4347826087 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269448615145 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939027295737 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884111149997 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200342975451 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473613937084 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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