In a recent investigation, it was concluded that birth order may affect individual's level of stimulation. In reaching this conclusion however, the author makes a number of unsupported assumptions, most notably that birth other is the main issue to understand the variation on individual's stimulation, putting aside that fact that perhaps more that the order, the mother gestation moment could be the more preponderant fact. Therefore, the author should conduct more research to better support this conclusion.
As noted above, the author mention evidence on monkeys, where the first infant produce up twice as much of the hormone cortisol, than their younger siblings. However, this argument is not clear about the mother situation when giving birth, an issue that might have a huge impact on the development of the monkey. For example, for been a first- time mother, the levels of anxiety and stress under this unknown situation may induce the fetus to be born with these levels of hormones. To strengthen this argument, the author should conduct an experiment where a child's number of hormones can be measured for a mother with high levels of stress with more than one child, in order to evaluate the fact that mother corporal and mental situation do not affect the fetos, more that the order or giving birth.
In addition, the author does no explore further other factors he mentions such as it is clear that firs-time mother monkeys have higher levels of cortisol, that the more experimented ones. However, assuming that because of the firs-time condition the cortisol level is higher, is like omitting other situation than can increase mother cortisol levels such as been under threat in the jungle, or be in a season of penury, where mother can also be pregnant and increasing the child's cortisol level, without being her first son. At this point, the author should compare cortisol level on childs who were conceived under extreme situation, versus, other ones who were born in a natural moment, in order to understand the real impact of mothers in the hormone in newborns.
As discussed above, the argument that birth order can in some way affect the individuals’ level of stimulation, is based on a number of assumptions, and more concrete evidence is needed to understand the real problem about level of stimulation, rather than giving the whole responsibility to birth order. Until more information is considerate, the author cannot assure this conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 2019 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.56 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.654 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.409 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...in issue to understand the variation on individuals stimulation, putting aside that fact th...
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Line 2, column 804, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, more that the order or giving birth. In addition, the author does no explore ...
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Line 4, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e author cannot assure this conclusion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13366336634 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70988398798 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475247524752 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.8212333226 57.8364921388 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.833333333 119.503703932 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 23.324526521 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131924197576 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614530690585 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649688666536 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102140460476 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043517250814 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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