TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

In this modern world everyone is busy in their work, most of the parents are working no like earlier time and they do not have time to look after their kids. For this issues, I want to suggests that parent can spent their available in their kid's home that has lot of advantages. To support, my opinion I want give some real events which happens in my life and surroundings.

First of all, all working parents are well educate and qualified persons, they work as tuition teacher instead sending them the special classes and other stuffs which not necessary for their kids. Further, that will fun when the kids are learning from their parent, they need not hesitate to ask chilly question. May be those kind of question embarrass the teacher but not the parents because they are their own. Parents will definitely take in positive way rather misunderstanding their kids where as in school environment they have follow certain rules and regulation even regarding asking question.

Secondly, this will be so economical. For example, to provide the art class, sports, tuition and so on, we have arrange separate teachers for each subjects or activities that cost so much burden for parents. In addition to that they take care kids healthcare, house rent, other utilities instead of having great knowledge and experiences in so many fields. Eventhough, playing with kids in games and sports gives pleasure, still educating through accompanying with their class work is most important at present situation, world is very competitive, they should prepare for tomorrow future than today's enjoyments.

Thirdly, kids those who are complete work with parents-always they proud about their parents at all time. For example, friend of mine who is engineer in infrastructure company whose son got the different solution for mathematics problems with his father guidelines-which makes him so happy about his father support. He always this whenever, I go to his house. Every parent should be work like that and be hero or genes infront of your kid. That makes both you feel happy about what your doing. It gives great pathway for kids in the future like a role model that is what very parents want ultimately.

To conclude, in order to share your knowledge, experiences, reduce the cost of living and to be a proud parent. One must spend whatever available left over to you- spend with kid's school work rather going sports or games.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...have time to look after their kids. For this issues, I want to suggests that parent ...
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Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'suggest'.
Suggestion: suggest
... their kids. For this issues, I want to suggests that parent can spent their available i...
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Line 3, column 44, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'educated'.
Suggestion: educated
...st of all, all working parents are well educate and qualified persons, they work as tui...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ot hesitate to ask chilly question. May be those kind of question embarrass the te...
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Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
...hesitate to ask chilly question. May be those kind of question embarrass the teacher but n...
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
... way rather misunderstanding their kids where as in school environment they have follow ...
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Line 3, column 535, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'followed'.
Suggestion: followed
...here as in school environment they have follow certain rules and regulation even regar...
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Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'arranged'.
Suggestion: arranged
...ass, sports, tuition and so on, we have arrange separate teachers for each subjects or ...
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Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Thirdly, kids those who are complete work with parents-always they proud abou...
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Line 7, column 321, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...m so happy about his father support. He always this whenever, I go to his house. Every pare...
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Line 7, column 385, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worked', 'wrought'?
Suggestion: worked; wrought
...go to his house. Every parent should be work like that and be hero or genes infront ...
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Line 7, column 484, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...at makes both you feel happy about what your doing. It gives great pathway for kids ...
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Line 9, column 223, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hool work rather going sports or games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, for example, in addition, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9802955665 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57430524407 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573891625616 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7264906093 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.421052632 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165418555788 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517757675047 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550490203605 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098316940616 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519251492699 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.