Television advertising is the most popular and specially, effective media in the last decades. Of course its target is to effect the audiences all over the world in various ages. Personally i am agree with the point that young children about three or four years old should not be allowed to watch some advertisements that may influence their behavior or brainstorms. parent should be aware of disadvantages may a media can effect their children . there are two reasons to support my idea that i am going to explain them below.
the first and the most important thing that comes to my mind is that a young child is not able to distinguish the thing that is good or bad for him or her. in other words their brain is not as developed as to figure out. to more specifically a three years old child can not evaluate the advantages or disadvantages of a meal that eats. usually children like the food that is harmful to their body. so in this case parent can advise them sympathetically and prevent them from eating it. thats why a child cannot distinct a meal that is advertising in a television commercial is harmful to him or her, or not.
secondly, if a child see everything in the television advertisement may want them all from their children. they might be somewhat expensive or even scares at that time. personally, i think it can compel parent to buy everything that baby wants and it causes a huge amount of money waste. for example my nephew, benjamin, when sees a dull or something he immediately asks his father to buy . due to his father's job i know that he is in the difficult situation instead of his baby. on the other hand about ninety percent of the child's requests are unnecessary that he has maybe plenty of them at the moment. so it is a reason to prevent the family from unnecessary costs.
in the conclusion, i would prefer the point that we must aware of the things and programs that our children are watching in the television. this point depends on two reason . at first, the children's brain can not help them to compare the nice or harmful things to them. secondly, it can help family to save more money in order to provide the family's necessary goods. consequently the advertising policy in television should be refined.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, i think, of course, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 401.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62094763092 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69768255681 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506234413965 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6914723915 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5652173913 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4347826087 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4347826087 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.01903807615 618% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16634716965 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489890369083 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523493455491 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105574145986 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562702320831 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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