People may not always have the job they desire, but should they sacrifise other opprtunities such as declining another job?
While some migh believe that opurrtunities dont repeat so it is better to accept any job currently available, others disagree. I believe that searching for your dream career is worth the extra hassle, since you will be less motivated in a job you don't desire and you will always be wondering what would have happened if you didn't give up.
First, if you settle in a career that you don't want, you will be lack the motivation to do it when things go rough. This in turn, would lead to a failure. For example, my father always wanted to be a financial manager. But after graduation there were not that many openings for junior financial manager. Since he was the primary breadwinner of the family, he had to choose a job. So he became an accountant in an eminent corpration. He had thaught to himself that since the pay was good, he wuold be motivated enough to perform his job. However, his duties got more intense and the work became very demanding and time consuming. Some days he was required to work extra and stay till midnight to complete the projects he had been asigned. Since he didn't like this job in the first place, these pressures made things worse for him and he became depressed. As a result, he wasn't able to perform his duties properly and after a few mistaked he made on the job, and got fired.
Second, if you don't go after your dreams, you are always giong to be tormentong yourself on not following your dreams and blaming everything bad that happens on this. For instance, my mother always wanted to be a translator for renowed international agancy such as UN. She is fluent in french and English. But she was offered a job as a teacher in state schools system. This job compensated well, and provide insurance. In addition, She didn' mind teaching. So she accepted the offer.After twenty years, Whenever she watches TV and sees on news the projects led by UN, she wonders what would have happened if she didn't setle for being a teacher and pursued her drwam career and now worked in an exciting project that would have taken her around the world and offered her the oppurtunity to impact have an impact on the world.
In sum, going after the first job offered to you without carefully examining whether you really desire it would lead to failure, especially when you don't like the job since if the job gets demanding enough, you wouldn't be motivated enough to meet the expectations. It will also leave you wondering about the oppurtunities you have lost by not being patioent enogh and giving up too easily.
- TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec 60
- TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63213530655 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46123302071 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509513742072 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.4834884636 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2608695652 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5652173913 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218453656032 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637496909099 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529120205938 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150705163189 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039283112605 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.