In this modern world everyone is working hard to earn money for their survival, it is very difficult to make money and we have lot of commitments in our life. So, we have use our fund very wisely, for that, one should spend money for the future rather on pleasure thinks like vacation or traveling. To support, statement I want to give some my own experiences.
First of all, most of us are middle class family and have lots of commitments towards our life. For example, I have lot of people who dependent on me-my nice everytimes requires money for pay her tuition and hostel fees which more important for me. Some of my family member going get marry, so should arrange handsome money the function. In this situation how can spend the money lavishly?. May be, vacation gives physical satisfactions but not fulfill the mind which emotional sentiment for me.
Secondly, To get obtain good health, we need some surety that in old we can manage our health. In order to do so we need such as insurance and so on which necessary in today's world, for that we need money. Who will take care of us in oldage. It is true that- going to different part of the country gives some sort real world experience and knowledge but what about future that will become question mark. Further, to led the health food habit we need money, for example, to get the organic food money twice than normal food items.
Thirdly, to give better education to our kids. If, we want our children well educated person then-we should join them like international school rather than ordinary school which so expensive in today's lifestyle. So, we have spend the money wisely than traveling here and there. of course some kind of relaxation and we can relief from stress but what about our kid's life in future. We should have anticipation for their struggle, for that need more money and resources.
Finally, to give donation and establish our business we need money. Some previllage children like disabled kids there in my society, I want to help them and educate them, so I need money. Because, I save last ten years earning, today-i can open the rehabilitation center otherwise that will be my day dream. This rehabilitation more psychological,socio-economical pleasure which great than the physical happiness in my point of view.
To conclude, in order to fulfil our commitments, to give education, to establish our profession and to help other, everyone must save their money for future rather than for vacation which gives only the physical happiness not the mental satisfaction which is needed specially for Indian society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: who is a dependent
...life. For example, I have lot of people who dependent on me-my nice everytimes requires money...
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Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n todays world, for that we need money. Who will take care of us in oldage. It is t...
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..., to give better education to our kids. If, we want our children well educated per...
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...is needed specially for Indian society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, for example, kind of, of course, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85874439462 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75747655093 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511210762332 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6792617125 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2173913043 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3913043478 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350703845188 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106766496492 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095044298432 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204410809965 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541110454008 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.