The director of the student housing at Buckingham College suggested that new hostels should be build in order to solve the future problem of accommodation of students and also it will help to increase the percentage of student enrollment. At first glance the letter seems to be convincing but there are many loopholes in it.
Firstly, the author is speaking about increase in number of student admissions from future perspective. He is talking about next 50 years looking at the present trends of the enrollments. But there is no surety that the current trend will continue for next decades. There is possibility that some other college will gain more reputation in the near future and thus, students' preference may change about the Buckingham College. Hence, the college may not be able to recover the expenses that it will spend on the construction of hostels.
Secondly, the writer is talking about current rise in the apartment rents and thereby, concluding that students may not prefer them as a choice of residence. Maybe the rent will get stabilize or drop down in the future due to certain market reasons. There are chances that in future students may choose apartments over dormitories due to less rent. Moreover, many students like to live off-campus as there is freedom and no restrictions. Thus, plan of making more dormitories need to be given more cogitative thought.
Lastly, students prefer colleges which provide good education and campus recruitment. Attractive dormitories is not an important factor that is considered while making decision regarding college admission. Additionally, there is possibility that many colleges in the city have more attractive campus-housing. So students who make their choice by keeping in mind hostel of college will prefer those colleges over Buckingham College.
To sum up, the argument is not cogent with many perspective. To bolster the argument, the author needs to corroborate future trend of enrollment, provide detailed information on off-campus rents, and attest the soundness of the conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 328 350
No. of Characters: 1693 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.256 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.162 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.774 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.779 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 519, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed to be given more cogitative thought. Lastly, students prefer colleges which p...
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Line 9, column 44, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun perspective seems to be countable; consider using: 'many perspectives'.
Suggestion: many perspectives
...sum up, the argument is not cogent with many perspective. To bolster the argument, the author ne...
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Line 9, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rgument, the author needs to corroborate future trend of enrollment, provide deta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, lastly, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, while, speaking about, talking about, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 328.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30487804878 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87784207608 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539634146341 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1682396396 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186695075792 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535455717115 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649349672768 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105783756565 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740939428526 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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