Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephones and email have made communication between people less personal. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
People are using many different communication devices such as cellphones and computers. Some people may think that phones and emails have established conversations less personal and I totally disagree with them which I will explain in two main reasons.
Firstly, Devices are not writing messages by their own and everybody have own unique nickname or number while using communication devices, which means that there is always person who replies You back. Therefore, people are aware of this fact, a specially when They are talking about memories or things previously discussed in real life during the meeting. For example: I remember in 1995 when me and my friend created our first email accounts. We were excited about it because we always loved new technology things. Consequently, we started to use emails very often and I was sure that I was corresponding with my friend because his unique name Slinkydex was related with our common experiences when We were small kids, which always makes me laugh.
Secondly, Technology of phones and emails is so advanced that we can see each other because of video conferencing. People like to see each other when they are talking, so video conference is best way to do it. Consequently, seeing and hearing each other during video conversation makes people not only more personal, but also easier because there is no need to waste so much time, energy and money to travel to meeting destination. For instance: I remember when I was in college 2500 miles away from my home and I really wanted to meet with my Dad, but, unfortunately, I was not able to, but instead of traveling to home, I could videocall to my father to see and hear him.
In conclusion, In my opinion, technology such as email and phone conversations are necessary in our lives, which makes it easier and there is no problem with personal feelings because of various unique names in internet and videoconferences, which makes us sure that our feelings during conversation are real.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
People are using many different communication devices such as cellphone...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...n they are talking, so video conference is best way to do it. Consequently, seeing and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, talking about, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97014925373 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79887002627 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564179104478 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.1020975531 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.75 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9166666667 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.75 5.45110844103 271% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14553005241 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573209986969 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440762660058 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100639967081 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611525379482 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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