In modern life, technology let us to live in a more convenient life and also make us to live in a fast pace. We have to do more works than 10 years ago, so everyone lives in a very busy life. Nevertheless, because people are busy doing so many different things in a day, they do very few things well.
When we are busy it is hard for us to think everything in a comprehensive way because we have to think too much things in the same time. Take my mom for example, when she wakes up every day, she not only has to make the breakfast for our family but also prepares the meeting on 10:00. Sometimes she forgets to fry the eggs which should put in the toast, and sometimes she forgets the beverage for the breakfast because she has to think what should she do for the presentation in the meeting. Therefore, it's hard for us to do everything well when we are busy.
In addition, when we are busy, we would feel nervous easily and it will make us easy to make mistakes. For instance, when I have to finish two or more homework at the same time, it's easy for me to wrote the wrong letter that will cause the wrong answer in my calculation. I often write "Q" as "O" and "U" as "V" when I am under the huge pressure. As a result, it will make us do few things well when we are busy.
However, even though it will make us hard to perform well when we are busy, sometimes we could learn how to schedule our time to prevent it from happening. Sometimes we are busy because of the bad control of time. We could write our homework or practice piano rather than watching youtube videos.
To sum up, I agree with the claim that because people are so busy that they would do very few things well because it will make us feel nervous and hard to think thoroughly when they are busy. However, sometimes if we can plan our schedule more smartly, we don’t have to face the difficult situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...eless, because people are busy doing so many different things in a day, they do very few thing...
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Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a comprehensive way" with adverb for "comprehensive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y it is hard for us to think everything in a comprehensive way because we have to think too much thing...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ensive way because we have to think too much things in the same time. Take my mom fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36565096953 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47339415682 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454293628809 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6129549991 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0700176582686 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289253060174 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0214713573155 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0433732360867 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161848315192 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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