Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it better to save your money for some time in the future? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Submitted by yjkim192 on Sat, 11/03/2018 - 21:20

Money is crucial in order to enjoy your life. On top of that, what time you utilize your money is as important as earning them. Some people might say that it is better to enjoy your money when you earn it but I firmly believe that people should save money for some time in the future.

The main reason for this assertion is because we do not know what might happen in the future that requires money, so it would not hurt to have some spare cash. People need money for unexpected car accidents, they might need to pay extra tuition fees for their sons and daughters, or maybe you just want to go on a family vacation which requires a large amount of money. To illustrate my reason with the experience I went through, two years ago the car I was driving suddenly malfunctioned. The car went into to get a repair but I needed something immediately for transportation. Luckily, I had some money saved to buy a new car to replace my old car which I sold after it was fixed. If I had not saved any allowances, I would not have any options to cover up my immediate emergency.

Another reason for my statement is that when people are allowed to use money with no plans they tend to waste it. People become irrational when they shop. People start to buy things they would not even use. Even somewhere in their brain they know that they do not necessarily need it, however, they just buy items anyway because of the feel of pleasure at the moment. This happens a lot when girls go shopping at a department store and when boys roam around game stores. This will happen more often if people are allowed to spend their stipend right away. Instead of making this happening, it is much better to rather save the money and plan out how to use it in the future to optimize the use of it.

Finally, It is really satisfying to see the amount of money you have saved increase day by day. People often say that spending money relieves your stress but they do not mention how equally or more satisfying it is to see your bank deposited number rise. This is because the money you have accumulated indicates your hard work and consistent effort. I remember me bragging to my friends whenever I saved a lot of money. My friends always praised for my endurance and will to resist using all that money.

To sum up, because of all the reasons I mention above it is clear to me that people should save money for the future. They should not give in to the impulse to spend all the money they just earn for useless reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... optimize the use of it. Finally, It is really satisfying to see the amount of money you have sav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, finally, however, if, may, really, so, even so, to sum up, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37553648069 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2848394385 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469957081545 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7217029217 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.652173913 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2608695652 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73913043478 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396697169761 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123268950973 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109092373213 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253184280652 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157471575772 0.0645574589148 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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