In this era, people need to more be sociable than the past in order to be successful. In this regard, the government can consider some plans to improve the personality of young people for being the best leadership. Some governors believe that the most important characteristic of perfect leadership is having a sense of cooperation; while others think that leaders should know how to compete. As for this writer's opinion, I subscribe to the former idea. In what follows, I elaborate on my reasoning and examples.
To begin with, leadership can gain ideas from cooperation with each other. No one can refuse that a big person such as Mike zukerburg could establish the Facebook company with the help of others. It is clear that he did not have enough ability to follow his idea, lonely. When people cooperate with each other they provide new ideas and improve each other's idea by showing the faults or power of one idea. Consider a leadership manager who decides to improve the employees' functionality; so, he can share his or her idea with someone else and deliberates his/her plan after consultation. In this way, he/she could be more successful because different persons have different minds and consequently they look from a different lens. Hence, the more ideas come to a plan, the best decision a manager should make.
To add, cooperation brings the sense of humanity and friendship. In this era, people who are friendly and easygoing are more successful and bold in society. A manager with the sense of cooperation with employees can affect the performance of the members because all members feel that they are an important part of the company and they try to their best and enhance their productivity. In addition, employees can talk more about their problems with the leader; also they can bring some solutions and idea in order to make the company a better place for everyone.
Finally, although the sense of cooperation is crucial for young leadership competition also can bring advantageous to them. Leaders can compete with each other to be the best one in society. If there is no competition between persons they cannot improve their jobs or positions, absolutely a real and healthy competition not a destructive one.
To put it briefly, as I mentioned above, one can infer that young people should learn how to install the sense of cooperation in themselves because not only can they improve their ideas and share them with different people but also they can create the friendly environment for everyone who works with his or her.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 406, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...should know how to compete. As for this writers opinion, I subscribe to the former idea...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...they provide new ideas and improve each others idea by showing the faults or power of ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 464, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...ship manager who decides to improve the employees functionality; so, he can share his or ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, finally, hence, if, look, so, while, as for, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94651162791 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70291091607 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481395348837 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.584962845 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.35 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170419900234 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618238284256 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609707212392 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120809486238 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500549616203 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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