The topic mentioned is highly debatable because there are two types of parents who are flexible and allow the child to get exposed to new stuff and the other kind who are orthodox and strict about such things. In my view, I disagree with the given statement and in fact television advertising directed towards age 2 to 5 can be allowed. I would like to discuss the reasons in the following paragraphs of this essay.
First of all, children who are aged between 2 and 5 can learn new things when a certain advertisement is directed to them. There is no harm in the advertisements as it is itself a targeted ad and we can safely assume that the advertisement content is apt. Children can learn new things because if we look into a personal example of mine – I used to watch ads and see the pictures of ads though I couldn’t understand the text in them. But as I grew up I was able to correlate things I watched in the ads when I was able enough read about them in the later years (between 5 and 10). This clearly corroborates the famous saying about learning – “A picture is worth thousand words”. The pictures in the ads really helped me in keeping up with suitable pace of learning according to my age.
Secondly, children will be deprived of the societal knowledge about the entities existing in the society. With ads they get a sense of what is available in the market and what is going on. Although it seems unnecessary, it is helpful in understanding how the society works. The children might not well understand the ads in-depth but the advertisements would give a sense of something new to them. Parents won’t play a major role in introducing new things to them as they are scared about the bad that could happen to their young child because of the knowledge of the content showed. For instance, there was a friend of mine in primary school who was unaware of many items we discussed in the market. Due to the ignorance about such items, lack of exposure and lack of maturity by the time of teenage, he became lonely as he was isolated from the young age itself. That pushed him into depression when he became a teenager. Accordingly, there is no point in not directing targeted ads towards toddlers aged 2-5 which could keep them at loss.
In conclusion, the statement could be well-analyzed and debated if more information was provided. I strongly disagree that the television ads directed towards age group 2 to 5 should not allowed for two reasons. First, kids might be deprived of learning and second, they might also become lonely at later stage in life because of not being able to participate in their young toddler discussion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...exposed to new stuff and the other kind who are orthodox and strict about such things. ...
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Line 3, column 779, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
...eping up with suitable pace of learning according to my age. Secondly, children will b...
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Line 7, column 188, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'allow'
Suggestion: allow
...ted towards age group 2 to 5 should not allowed for two reasons. First, kids might be d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63157894737 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69572679185 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486315789474 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1494606873 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.761904762 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.619047619 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21093536479 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663995890663 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820115633554 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149757679685 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618851632412 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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