It is important for the government to provide meney to things that are beautiful and not just for things that are practical.
When the government spends money on the development of cities, beauty and practicality are two very important key points. Some people think that practicality is more essential than beauty, whereas others hold the opposite opinion. In my perspectives, I believe beauty and practicality are equally significant on the issue. I will explore the reasons in the following essay.
First of all, the government needs tax revenue to function well and the arts could produce tax revenue. For example, in my country, we have a great building called Taipei 101, which is the tallest structure in Asia once and very famous in the world. Taipei 101 was funding by the government and constructed by one of best constructors in the world. Many tourists will travel to Taiwan for seeing this city's hallmark and wishing that could stand on the top layer in the building. Tourism's revenue could bring a huge income to the government.
Second, beautiful arts could increase the happiness index of citizens and, by this increase, people have many positive influences in many places. According to the research, conducted by Executive Yuan in my country, the number of worker's efficiency in the past three years has surprisingly improved roughly about 12% in Taipei. In fact, the contributing factor lies in the fact that workers cannot perform well under many stresses. Because of the happiness increase, people in the city feel much happier than before, and it largely promotes the motivation and impetus of citizens to work. The case is not rare. Many different cities in the world have the same phenomenon. Such would be the direct evidence that bears witness to the fact that beauty is the benefit to cities.
To sum up, the two reasons mentioned on the above seem that only indicate how beauty is important but the two reasons actually point that when the government considers providing money to such things, they already have considered the benefits behind the beautiful things such as arts. And it is actually the part of practicality. Thus, I am of opinion that practicality is as important as beauty.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
...y the government and constructed by one of best constructors in the world. Many tourist...
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Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'Many'.
Suggestion: Many
...citizens to work. The case is not rare. Many different cities in the world have the same pheno...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, second, so, thus, well, whereas, for example, in fact, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03735632184 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68348959302 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563218390805 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7540875267 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2631578947 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3157894737 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1676483789 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359488590129 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458346286221 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935512014705 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522534878736 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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