It is recommended that education services should be limited at primary level in nations facing high unemployment rate. I totally disagree with this policy due to its negative impacts on both the economy and the society.
From an economic perspective, making secondary education unavailable to the majority of students can be seen as an unwise decision because of an imbalance in labor structure it creates. Indeed, if most pupils were provided with primary education only, there would be a vast population having insufficient academic knowledge, allowing them to perform clerical works only. Consequently, the labor market would be dominated by blue-collar workers rather than white-collar employees, which leads to harsh recruitments for sweated labors and, therefore, unemployment may not be alleviated. Another disadvantage is that this makes states less likely to gain a competitive edge. Specifically, stepping into the 21st century, technological breakthroughs has been increasingly prevalent, production efficiency is being significantly upgraded by automation and the replacement of employees with machines, the advantages of which cannot be reaped by countries accomplishing those works manually.
From a social perspective, limited access to secondary education can be proved to be detrimental to the domestic tranquility. Firstly, not only does training programs offered by secondary schools focus on academic knowledge but also prepares youngsters for entering their adult life. Thus, as the shapers of a nation’s future, they are prone to face an austerity of soft skills, the drawbacks of which will be suffered by the whole country. Secondly, since education is considered to be a basic human right, any policy against its free access can be deemed as personal freedom infringement. Hence, if children are deterred from attending secondary schools, the authority may face a rage of criticism, leading to antisocial behaviors threatening social fabrics and raising a question mark over the order of law and constitution.
In brief, I strongly believe that people should oppose limitation of secondary education, since the bad influences it exerts are serious.
- The charts below show changes in the proportion of the energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education, and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. 78
- Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages? 89
- Nowadays, sport is becoming a big business with high earning for professional sportsmen and a lot of companies have involved in financially and in other ways.Is this a positive or negative development? 84
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69724770642 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16611989663 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.8904308036 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.307692308 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187742937356 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608404994578 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372857553598 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104754427255 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017919142873 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.72 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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