people toady spend too much time on personal enjoyment -doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do
I really agree on this statement that ," People spend too much time on personal enjoyment instead of doing such work they must have do". 21st century is provides the more comfort and luxrious life to poeple because today we are with lots of new and advanced technologies which help us to make all work easy and save out time. That remain time we can used for another activities like enhance our hobby, increase or generalknowledge, help our parents like many valueable activities we can do in the free time.However we don't do these all things because we spend our too much time on personal enjoyment instead of doing things which we must have to do for us,for our parent and for our country.
Now a days, everybody like to give party for their small achivement or any family celeberation.Some person does't requrie any reason to do parties . They just do that parties just for fun or personal enjoyment such like weekend celebration. Everybody who like to do these things they really waste their time in parties. Instead of doing parties for enjoyment they can used their time in such work which will help them in future like enhance your hobby. Like in free time you can read some newspapers and magzines or you can help poor older by doing their work or you can give that time to your family.
Moreover, the teenager group who alway used thier time for personal enjoyment such like watching online movies, chating with friends,playing the online games.
instead of studing. This new generation like to enjoy thier life with internet. They want more privacy and more fun.To that things they also ready to bunk thier lecture and also trying to betary their parents. They have to used this time for good work like help their parent or by doing study. But this not happened today.
you can enjoy your life at some time in year when you boared out all things,But everyday making fun and enjoyment is good thing for us. Think it.
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Sentence: 21st century is provides the more comfort and luxrious life to poeple because today we are with lots of new and advanced technologies which help us to make all work easy and save out time.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to is and provides
we can used for another activities
we can use for other activities
Sentence: Instead of doing parties for enjoyment they can used their time in such work which will help them in future like enhance your hobby.
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Sentence: They have to used this time for good work like help their parent or by doing study.
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Suggestion: Refer to to and used
Sentence: 21st century is provides the more comfort and luxrious life to poeple because today we are with lots of new and advanced technologies which help us to make all work easy and save out time.
Error: luxrious Suggestion: luxurious
Error: poeple Suggestion: people
Sentence: That remain time we can used for another activities like enhance our hobby, increase or generalknowledge, help our parents like many valueable activities we can do in the free time.However we don't do these all things because we spend our too much time on personal enjoyment instead of doing things which we must have to do for us,for our parent and for our country.
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Error: generalknowledge Suggestion: general knowledge
Sentence: Now a days, everybody like to give party for their small achivement or any family celeberation.Some person does't requrie any reason to do parties .
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Sentence: Like in free time you can read some newspapers and magzines or you can help poor older by doing their work or you can give that time to your family.
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Sentence: Moreover, the teenager group who alway used thier time for personal enjoyment such like watching online movies, chating with friends,playing the online games.
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Sentence: instead of studing.
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Sentence: This new generation like to enjoy thier life with internet.
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Sentence: They want more privacy and more fun.To that things they also ready to bunk thier lecture and also trying to betary their parents.
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