The author states that the number of accidents in Balmer Islands can be significantly reduced by capping the maximum number of moped and bike rentals/day during peak summer months. Stated in this way the argument fails to provide substantial proof for its validity.
Firstly, it is not clear why such limitations are required in the first place. The argument does not explicitly state that summertime accidents are higher than other times of the year. Even if the number of accidents increase the % of accidents per person may still be the same. Furthermore, no change in policies is required to decrease a very low number of accidents. More data is required to analyse the situation here.
Secondly, it is not clear if a higher number of accidents observed have a causal relationship with the higher number of mopeds and bikes hired by people. Perhaps the increase in accidents can be attributed to other factors such as drinking and driving, car collisions, lack of traffic lights, uneven roads etc. Or maybe the accidents are not road accidents at all, they can be due to drowning, unsafe entertainment parks etc. Assuming a causal relationship exists, the author states that the number of hired moped and bikes should be limited to 30 per day. No evidence is provided for how this number was decided? What is the hired mopeds per day in peak summer time on the Balmer Islands?. If already this number is less than 30 per day we should not expect any change in the accident rates. Moreover, it needs to be determined what would be the appropriate value of mopeds running on islands roads?
The author provides an example of the island Torseau which had a 50% reduction in moped accidents last year. Before drawing any conclusions from this example it is not clear how many accidents were happening on the island per day. Since islands usually have a small population if the decrease is from 4 accidents per year to 2 accidents it can be due to a chance. Were any other measures taken other than limiting the number of hired mopeds to reduce the accident rate on the island?
In conclusion, all the assumptions must be carefully considered for the required recommendation to have the desired effect. Limiting the number of vehicles may decrease mobility of the tourists and act as a deterrent for visiting the island. Other alternate measures must also be considered before taking any such steps.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1949 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.742 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.581 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.081 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...argument does not explicitly state that summertime accidents are higher than other times o...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re higher than other times of the year. Even if the number of accidents increase the % ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 656, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...hat is the hired mopeds per day in peak summer time on the Balmer Islands?. If already this...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 692, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eak summer time on the Balmer Islands?. If already this number is less than 30 per...
^^
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...reduction in moped accidents last year. Before drawing any conclusions from this examp...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 485, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...reduce the accident rate on the island? In conclusion, all the assumptions must ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87804878049 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65938854414 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482926829268 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9343813646 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.9090909091 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6363636364 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135722450761 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468213625758 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731020081848 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911295306377 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643661460174 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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