In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowdays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.
What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in small community.
In the modern era like now, a number of inhabitants lived in the village where they were born, many people moved from village to large city with wishes either increased their quality of life or got a good job, it mean people's live has changed.
There were a number of benefits to living in a small village, firstly everyone were good healthy because there aren’t population in village. Secondly, residents were feeling more safe because there wasn’t crime in the village. By social perspective the advantages of living in small village were togetherness between some peoples other inhabitants, the reasons of highly togetherness it is because everyone in the villages knew everyone else. Outside of them there was mutual aid, everyone in village was respectful, so they were highly concern for every folks which need helped.
Whereas, there were several disadvantages, less attention by governments to develop small village gave the negative impact to inhabitants of the there. The information received slowly because there were not good transportation or great accommodation to send the information from city to small village, for example case in my country, when the governments made a new national regulation, the small villages were late to received information. Governments need three days until one week to publish the information to the villages.
All in all, in my humble opinion, residents lives in villages were calmer than citizens lives in the city, particularly in capital town, and the people in the village will help each other. However until recently peoples in village ware late receiving the information about update regulation from government in capital city.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2013-11-16 | Fadlanmuzakki | 70 | view |
- CHEVENING SCHOLARSHIP Your career plan and benefit to your home country Describe your immediate plans upon completion of your Chevening award You should explain your longer term 5 10 year career objectives and describe how your time in the UK will help yo 35
- In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city Centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city.Give reason in support of and opposing the policy, and give your own opinion. 70
- Recently some people can work from home using modern technology. Some think this only benefits the workers, but not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 70
- Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion. (SAMPLE) 90
- The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries. 80
either increased their quality of life or got a good job
either increasing their quality of life or getting a good job
There were a number of benefits to living in a small village,
There were a number of benefits to live in a small village,
it mean people's live has changed.
it means people's life has changed.
firstly everyone were good healthy
firstly everyone was in good health
Sentence: By social perspective the advantages of living in small village were togetherness between some peoples other inhabitants, the reasons of highly togetherness it is because everyone in the villages knew everyone else.
Description: A verb 'to be', past tense, 2nd person singular or all is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to were and togetherness
Description: A qualifier, pre is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to highly and togetherness
Sentence: Outside of them there was mutual aid, everyone in village was respectful, so they were highly concern for every folks which need helped.
Description: A qualifier, pre is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to highly and concern
Sentence: The information received slowly because there were not good transportation or great accommodation to send the information from city to small village, for example case in my country, when the governments made a new national regulation, the small villages were late to received information.
Description: The fragment slowly because there is not usually followed by were
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace were with was
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and received
Governments need three days until one week to publish the information to the villages.
Governments need three days to one week to publish the information to the villages.
residents lives in villages were calmer than citizens lives in the city
residents who live in villages were calmer than citizens lives in the city
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
Read a good grammar book.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 270 350
No. of Characters: 1380 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.111 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.736 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.611 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.452 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.685 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5