tpo51--Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
There is no doubt that viewpoints of the celebrities spread more widely in contemporary society, as people commonly use the internet social medium. Consequently, famous people ‘s opinions have more social impact on people recently. Some people claim that famous people’s opinions are more important to younger people than to older people. From my point of view, I’m totally agree with the former idea.
To begin with, the majority of young people use smartphone frequently, and they enjoy surfing the internet to follow their idols, besides only a few portion of older people use smartphone everyday. It is fact that a large number of older people don’t use samrtphone or surfing the internet, and most of older people who surfing the internet just read the news instead of issues with celebrities. Thus, opinions of famous people would not effect older people because they don’t read any ideas or comments about them. My grandparent, for instance, my grandmother have a smartphone but she just use it for making telephone call. However my grandfather who interests in surfing the internet favor of some government policy and international news, by the way he also likes to play chess with people in the internet. Therefore celebrities hard to effect older people who don’t surfing the internet.
In addition, the majority of celebrities are not in the same generation with older people, thus they hardly have same perspective and thinking, so older people may would not agree with celebrities opinions. Nowadays many older people could understand young people’s action or thinking due to their different education and growing environment,therefore older people always have counter opinions with most of younger celebrities. For example my grandfather could not enjoying songs that we enjoying, those recently popular songs like rock or electric music are too loud for him .
Ultimately, majority of older people uncommonly surfing the internet and they have different perspective with those famous people, and younger people spend more time surfing the internet, holding the same opinion with celebrities. Thus celebrities’ opinion more important to young people than older people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun portion seems to be countable; consider using: 'few portions'.
Suggestion: few portions
...t to follow their idols, besides only a few portion of older people use smartphone everyday...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... portion of older people use smartphone everyday. It is fact that a large number of olde...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...se smartphone everyday. It is fact that a large number of older people don't use samrtphone ...
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Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...us, opinions of famous people would not effect older people because they don't re...
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Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... just use it for making telephone call. However my grandfather who interests in surfing...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...play chess with people in the internet. Therefore celebrities hard to effect older people...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , therefore
...ferent education and growing environment,therefore older people always have counter opinio...
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Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'enjoy'
Suggestion: enjoy
...s. For example my grandfather could not enjoying songs that we enjoying, those recently ...
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Line 5, column 581, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...k or electric music are too loud for him . Ultimately, majority of older people...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ding the same opinion with celebrities. Thus celebrities' opinion more importan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, no doubt, by the way, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49127906977 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90466022793 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491279069767 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5967031972 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.933333333 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.86666666667 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18852838846 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880326012383 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582287631148 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138200001863 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303682975374 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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