Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea.The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author contends that earlier a particular types of woven baskets were believed to be made only by Palean people as it was found only in the immediate neighborhood of Palea .However, eventually with more discovery this type of basket was also found in the other region due to which the author asserts that the earlier view of this basket being made by only Palean people is wrong. In my opinion this assertion is based on incomplete information and some questionable facts.Following are the points I would put forth to bolster my opinion.
Firstly,as per the author the sample places that he has provided in the argument stem says that these baskets were found in immediate vicinty and another region which was right across the Brim river. In order to strengthen his argument that it is not uniquely Palean, he should have provided some evidence of a place which is really very far away from Paleans and cannot be reached by any means of commute.
Secondly, the argument also lacks the data where the time frame and geographic location should have been mentioned to understand whether boats were the only means to commute or they had a road connectivity as well to make the exchange of goods possible. Again,this information could support the author's view and be more persuasive.
Thirdly, the author has come to this conclusion by taking one point into consideration, which is, the only way to cross the deep and broad river was using a boat and no sign of the boats have not been found. In order to prove this claim as faulty I will create an analogy to the author's statement. Just as the author says that previously it was believed that these baskets were unique to Paleans but with more discovery they found it in Lithos as well .Similarly, there is a high possibility that currently archaeologists have not been able to find any boat but with an in depth investigation it could be found.
Hence, to conclude the evidence provided by the author are insufficient and challengeable in the mentioned aspects. Author should have done more research before placing his judgement as they are not convincing enough.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.7 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.521 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.993 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.678 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 60, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y in the immediate neighborhood of Palea .However, eventually with more discovery ...
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Line 2, column 62, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...in the immediate neighborhood of Palea .However, eventually with more discovery this ty...
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Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Following
...information and some questionable facts.Following are the points I would put forth to bol...
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Line 6, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
... forth to bolster my opinion. Firstly,as per the author the sample places that h...
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Line 12, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...ke the exchange of goods possible. Again,this information could support the authors v...
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Line 16, column 118, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... faulty I will create an analogy to the authors statement. Just as the author says that...
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Line 16, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... statement. Just as the author says that previously it was believed that these ba...
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Line 17, column 125, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...iscovery they found it in Lithos as well .Similarly, there is a high possibility ...
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Line 17, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Similarly
...covery they found it in Lithos as well .Similarly, there is a high possibility that curr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, really, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91483516484 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65733480569 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510989010989 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.4693125935 57.8364921388 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.636363636 119.503703932 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0909090909 23.324526521 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 5.70786347227 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 15.0 5.15768463074 291% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260231094844 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831438220524 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855138378054 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906194843963 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746670996704 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.3550499002 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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