do you agree or disagree
that tv and movies have negative impact more than positive on young age people behaviuor.
Entertainment effects society in many different ways. The most prominent affect not only the way how it is but also on which group of people it is mostly effective. Children according to mant statistical result show that the ages between5-10 is the higher percentage rin watching TV and movies. Although some people thinks that these entertainmnent have a good impression on their young people by enhancing their habits and also some educational programs in different fields as geology, astronomy etc. Iwill put forhead my substantiated believe that it’s negative impact more than positive one for several reasons.
To begin with, the observation on quality of certain program is not adequate enough to insure the positive transferred information through these programs. One of these programs which most our kids are watching is cartoon. For instance, my little one, Lara, she is 4 years old, she addicts on watching Tom and Jerry every day for at least one hour. I notice a remarkable changes in her behavior as she become more nutsy and copy past every harmful move that Tom do for Jerry. Therefore, I keeps her away from this cartoon and try to rebuild a new concepts in her small thinking that this behaviuor is not aproperiate to be done. Although, I takes lonbg time and effort to change it but, finally I could replant the valuable virtue in my daughter’s thinking.
In addition, most of the advertisement on TV send bad message about our kid’s healthy behavior. Most of programs especially those that appear at young age period, plethora of advertisement intrupt this period by announcing for certain new cookies or chocolate bars and so on. These type of advertisement enchourage those young people to try their best to have them. Thses type of gunky unhealthy food have tremendous effect on kids health. The list is long as it’s effect on their dental health, obesityetc.
In sum , I personaly disagree with those who believe the entertainment have more positive than negative effects on young people because of un controlled programe type that been shown and the bad impact on their heath through advertisement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, therefore, at least, for instance, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09915014164 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83704152629 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597733711048 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9291557636 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.882352941 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218484584058 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591556627402 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656549147086 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146389741307 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755933378187 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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