Since the hunter-gathered times until our modern days, nature played a vital role in each individual's life. Today, some people prefer to be part of it. These people believe that living countryside is best to bring up a child. However, others take radically different point. They live in big cities and take advantage of it. From my vantage point, I am with former group and the lines bellow will shed light on my viewpoint.
First of all, due to increasing urban population, big cities has become a dangerous place in terms of health condition. Air and noise pollution has skyrocketed compared to the last decades. Some researches demonstrate that kids who live in big cities have low resistance some illness. Moreover, the crime rates in urban cities are so high compared to the suburban. Even parents do not want to live in some big cities.
Secondly, in approaching the matter, apart from what mentioned above, there is another subtle point. I believe that kids should be part of nature. Especially, when they are in a stage acquiring new knowledge about our planet. Playing with animals teaches mercy. It makes them better individual in their futures.
Finally, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account, one cannot deny the importance of nature in the world of kids. Living in countryside is to kid's advantage. It save their health and makes them better person. The big cities is not good place to live for children.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer. 70
- Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years in the world that many cities now are "one big traffic jam". Do you think that this statement is true? What measure can government take to address this problem? (rewrite1) 90
- Some people think that parents should plan their children's leisure time carefully. Other people believe children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time. Which idea do you agree with? Give reasons for your choice. 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ays, nature played a vital role in each individuals life. Today, some people prefer to be p...
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Line 6, column 132, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'parted'?
Suggestion: parted
...le point. I believe that kids should be part of nature. Especially, when they are in...
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Line 8, column 172, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'saves'?
Suggestion: saves
...in countryside is to kids advantage. It save their health and makes them better pers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, apart from, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1200.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 242.0 407.700716846 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95867768595 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63135875619 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.640495867769 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1540052294 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.0 100.406767564 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.1 20.6045352989 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100928561613 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0306179832573 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039535658624 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0621538558425 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424713843722 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.6 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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