Your photograph has won the first prize in the photography competition.This will be displayed in an exhibition. Write a letter inviting your friend at the exhibition and include:1) What was the photograph about?2) Where did you take it?3) What prize have

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Your photograph has won the first prize in the photography competition.
This will be displayed in an exhibition. Write a letter inviting your friend at the exhibition and include:
1) What was the photograph about?
2) Where did you take it?
3) What prize have you won?

Dear Terry,

How are you mate? I am fine. I am happy to tell you that my photograph has secured first place in the community exhibition which takes place every year in my town. I invite you to come and check out the exhibition tomorrow, which I guess you will find interesting, and also to attend the presentation ceremony with me.

I took the snapshot at the Grand Central station, London, which is one of the crowded metro stations in the world. The photograph which I took captured the variety of emotions of various ethnicity and across all ages who were standing in a line to buy a ticket from the counter.

The prize which I won includes a wide range of camera lenses, camera cleaning equipment such as brush, lotions and a tripod. I am very excited and eagerly waiting to use all these tools once I receive my prize.

I look forward to seeing you at the exhibition tomorrow.

Lots of love,
Alex Peralta.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Terry, How are you mate? I am fine. I am happy ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hich takes place every year in my town. I invite you to come and check out the ex...
^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the presentation ceremony with me. I took the snapshot at the Grand Central ...
^
Line 11, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e exhibition tomorrow. Lots of love, Alex Peralta.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, look, so, i guess, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 764.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60240963855 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48756524317 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644578313253 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5771813623 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15959505106 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522276449819 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395201988013 0.0603063233224 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909225277739 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374168647528 0.0580467560999 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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