The argument that this text has presented has several loopholes which makes it weak. And, therefore, it can not be determined if Supercorp has made a favourable decision.
Firstsly, the established superiority of Corporateville is false. The author fails to reason the increase in number of homeowners. It wrongly assumes that a surge in homeowners is due to better living conditions in Corporateville. As we do not know where the new homeowners might be relocating from or why, it can not be determined if Corporateville is a superior place. Furthermore, the author assumes that this surge in homeowners is directly propotional to a decrease in the number of homeowners in Middlesburg. However, no such evidence is presented.
Secondly, the validity of the survey is highly questionable. There is no mention of a sample size of employees or when this survey was conducted. For all we know this survery could have been conducted five years ago with only 20 employees. The current scenario could be entriely different. Additionally, the author fails to explain what ' a predominately urban area' is. The questionaire given to the empployees could have misleading questions with the possibility of skewing the final results.
Thirdly, the author assumes that a decrease in taxes makes a city safer and cheaper to live. It may very well be true for being cheap, however, safety is compromised by deacresing taxes. With a lower revenue generated by the local government from decreased taxes, less so will be provided for the safety of the citizens. Fewer police officers whose training is subpar or the fire department whose equipment is faulty, could all lead to unsafe living conditions. Moreover, lower taxes may not mean that the economy is cheap too. The cost of buying a house and driving a car could still be high.
- SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live then Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Mi 63
- Technology, while apparently aimed to simplify our lives, only makes our lives more complicated. 16
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. This survey is only about workers where to live, not about where to work.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1478 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.927 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.916 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.339 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.261 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.47 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...percorp has made a favourable decision. Firstsly, the established superiority of...
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Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...However, no such evidence is presented. Secondly, the validity of the survey is ...
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Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...onally, the author fails to explain what a predominately urban area is. The quest...
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Line 5, column 494, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssibility of skewing the final results. Thirdly, the author assumes that a decre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 300.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02187579714 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.5962007445 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.2 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 23.324526521 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133999251062 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386191626429 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522920556931 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783394809733 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887858433109 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.