As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health.
To what extent do you agree or disagree
We know that everyone needs computers and televisions. Nowadays people must get information around the world. Only one way they receive it through computer and television. Even though those have negative and positive effect, in other side computers and televisions provide a lot of benefit to us.
Some people think that computers and televisions are important for their activity, it is because news has obtained by them, and those can help human activities so they can enjoy every day in front of computers and televisions. Others show that it is negative effect while pupil are sitting long time to use them. For the impact our bodies become cramps and eyes to be minus.
In the other hand, a few inhabitants think that not only computer and television have negative effect but also they have positive effect. The result computer, make people do many works easier, we can watch videos, play games, and also browsing the internet. Computers are also used by medicines in hospital. Now and in the future, medicines need computer technology for support their activity.
Most inhabitants are used computers and televisions to share or find a lot of knowledge. for example in school and university. in the past, electronic inventions such as the computer and television not famous yet around the corner. So that why, Society no need to use them.
in conclusion, Television is one of entertainment everyone who necessary for relax, laugh, and find news. And also computer is important thing in this world. Both of them have correlation between people life.
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Sentence: For the impact our bodies become cramps and eyes to be minus.
Suggestion: Can you re-write this sentence?
medicine need computer technology for support their activity.
medicines need computer technology for supporting their activity.
Sentence: We compare between in the past, electronic inventions such as the computer and television not famous yet around the corner.
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Suggestion: Refer to between and in
Sentence: To sum up, Television is one of the entertain everyone who necessary for relax, laugh, and find news.
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Suggestion: Refer to who and necessary
And also computer is important thing in this world.
And also computer is an important thing in this world.
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No. of Words: 256 350
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Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.7
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