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The chart illustrates populations growth between india and china between 2000 and 2050.A glance at the picture clearly reveals india dominates population rise over china after 2030.

In an overall India started with 1000 billions populations in 2000. There was gradual surge in the growth of the same.
From 2000 to 2010 india crossed 1300 billion and it will continue to rise with same for next 35 years.
In 2013 both india and china will have the same amount of population which is 1450 millions.

On the other hand In 2000, China started with 1250 billions and gradually grew till 1400. But after that it was plateau state for next five-year.
When threshold point meets between india and china , the entire population growth between them has changed the directions.
China will have gradually pit down from 2030 to 2050. However india will continue to reach 1600 in 2050.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...n india and china between 2000 and 2050.A glance at the picture clearly reveals i...
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Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... But after that it was plateau state for next five-year. When threshold point me...
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Line 8, column 51, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hold point meets between india and china , the entire population growth between th...
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Line 9, column 27, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'pitted'.
Suggestion: pitted
... directions. China will have gradually pit down from 2030 to 2050. However india w...
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Line 9, column 54, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e gradually pit down from 2030 to 2050. However india will continue to reach 1600 in 20...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 738.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 148.0 196.424390244 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98648648649 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48791127476 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22168939956 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601351351351 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 195.3 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4507287639 43.030603864 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.8 112.824112599 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 3.83414634146 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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