In the above argument, the writer states that with the recent increasing global warming trends, it has resulted in the declination of Arctic deer. The writer cites global warming as the main reasons for the decrease which might not be the only reason as there can be various factors that governs this consequences.
Firstly, global warming causes the temperature to rise which is actually favorable for the development and growth of the plants on which they feed on. And how can this result in the declination of the Arctic deer? There might have been some misreporting from the local hunters about their numbers.
Secondly, global warming has been into existence since many years ago and if this has to be the main cause then how come their numbers weren`t decreased at those times?? They have been adapting their body temperatures according to the environmental temperature. And every new generation tends to posses a strong adaptive features than their old ones. and how come this helps to decline in their numbers??? There is no such strong evidence to cite global warming as the main caus.
Thirdly, there might have been some kind of disasters like avalanches that might have washed away numbers of deer present in that area and during the reporting time the number might have been less. There might have been mistake in the reporting too as it becomes arduous to prepare reports on those cold climates and tedious too. So,there can be many factors for their declination.
In sum, i would like to say that the provided clue isn`t just sufficient to bolster the conclusion made by the writer and further expalantion with the statistical data and the observations regarding that subject would be preferred so that further undermining wouldn`t affect the conclusion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: these
...ere can be various factors that governs this consequences. Firstly, global warmi...
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Suggestion:
...l warming causes the temperature to rise which is actually favorable for the deve...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'feature'?
Suggestion: feature
...ation tends to posses a strong adaptive features than their old ones. and how come this ...
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Suggestion: And
... adaptive features than their old ones. and how come this helps to decline in their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09152542373 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63650373939 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55593220339 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.859584815 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.285714286 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151622843229 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570773211998 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382436347155 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884511696576 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565552812197 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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