In some parts of the world people have became more focused on themselves than their communities What problems can this situation cause and how can they be solved

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In some parts of the world, people have became more focused on themselves than their communities. What problems can this situation cause and how can they be solved?

Nowadays the majority of the group population is being more focused on themselves then of others. This could cause a lot of problems connected to anxiety, feeling uncomfortable about communicating where others on daily bases.

One cause might be social networking. On social network we decide who we will be following or with whom are we going to be friends with. We create our own virtual world where we can feel comfortable. For instance sharing too much on social media maybe one of the causes. For example when we communicate with our friend or a sibling probably we won’t share anything new with them, because we already did it on internet. Moreover this might lead to distancing us from others. Less communicating with others will result to making us antisocial which can cause depression or anxiety, because as a human being is we are in need for allocating.

A further measures could be avoiding sharing too much on social media. We should not just the avoid sharing pictures, we should also stop chatting 24 hours a day with our friends, so that when we are out with them we can focus on what is going on in our lives. Another method might be going out more frequently with new people or our friends. For example if we want to meet new surroundings we can register to some art classes or a sport activities, there we can find new people with interest similar to ours who can became our new friends.

In conclusion, keeping away from sharing too much information on the Internet and looking for new friends, may help for being more focused on others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73454545455 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61756053235 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5337329243 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169293466566 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715082278975 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445782429789 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11631266022 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385998697942 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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