With the advent of urbanisation and the rise in popularity of fast food, there have been accompanying issues with rising obesity rates – especially in developed countries like England and the USA. After providing a careful analysis of why obesity has risen so sharply in these countries, I shall suggest a number of ways in which the obesity epidemic can be ameliorated.
To begin with, it should be unsurprising that fast food is incredibly popular in wealthy countries (like England and the USA). Due to the high levels of development in these countries, consumers possess more money and can therefore consume vast amounts of fast food without seriously diminishing their income. For example, the American Dietary Association found that (compared to the average Indian household), the average American household has a six times larger budget for food per month. Consequently, it is to be expected that obesity rates are much higher in countries with larger amounts of wealth.
However, despite the severity of the obesity problem, there are a number of ways in which developed countries could battle it more effectively. Firstly, developed governments could put far more pressure on fast food outlets to provide healthy alternatives to hamburgers, french fries and soft drinks.
Secondly, public exercise initiatives could be advertised and promoted far more vigorously. Lastly, modules that inform teenagers about healthy dietary requirements could be taught at schools.
In conclusion, although obesity is a serious issue in the developed world, if the above steps are taken, the situation will surely improve in the coming years
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39688715953 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82376090375 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5953307393 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0774518894 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.090909091 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124958774615 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462858429532 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050868994036 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.066703975006 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463493767018 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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