The author states that on-campus housing has to be improved mainly because of expensive off-campus rents and lack of space for the students in the future. However, there is still room for plenty of evidence to be provided before this argument becomes as persuasive as the author desires.
First of all, more evidence is needed to ensure the director that the present situation is as described in the argument. When the author is talking about growing enrollment, some evidence is needed to indicate that this increasing enrollment implies an increase in the need for dormitory. Perhaps most of this...
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Sentence: Besides, he has to strengthen his argument when he suggest building new dorms as a practical option or when he later sates that having new dorms will attract more students.
Description: The fragment he suggest building is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace suggest with verb, past tense
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Category: Excellent Excellent
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No. of Characters: 2427 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.883 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.622 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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