IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event:1. Explain why you are interested in helping2. give details suitable past experience3. suggest ways you might help with the eventWrite at least 150 words.

Submitted by Narang on Thu, 03/14/2019 - 07:20

Dear Sir
I am Shilpa Narang and I am writing you with reference to the advertisement I saw on the metro station wall.
I saw that your NGO , "Being Human" is about to start a program for teaching poor children. I also got awared that you are looking for some educated volunteers who can make up sometime to teach poor children. For the same, I wish to follow up regarding the issue as I am interested in this event. I am really keen over this activity as teaching is my passion and helping poor and needy people gives us a tremendous peace.
This activity also suits me as I generally have free evenings after my job. I also hold a experience in teaching and was taking extra tuition classes for small children from past 6 years while pursuing my PhD degree. I feel that I will be able to help all students uptil grade 10 specially in Mathematics and Science. If necessary i would also like to help few of them with their school fees. I will try my level best to help them so that they can excel on academic grounds.
I hope you will follow up with any other future query. My contact number for same is 9874528199.

Regards
Shilpa

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...etro station wall. I saw that your NGO , 'Being Human' is about to sta...
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Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...free evenings after my job. I also hold a experience in teaching and was taking e...
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Line 4, column 318, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...0 specially in Mathematics and Science. If necessary i would also like to help few...
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Line 4, column 331, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...n Mathematics and Science. If necessary i would also like to help few of them wit...
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Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...umber for same is 9874528199. Regards Shilpa
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, really, regarding, so, while, i feel, with reference to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 938.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42452830189 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50601339863 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646226415094 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8989099334 44.8134815571 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1666666667 76.5299724578 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153681820058 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503486680472 0.0766984524023 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340865940805 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099882200291 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290005807141 0.0580467560999 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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