Mobile phones have an important role in people's lives. What are the pros and cons of using smartphones?
These days with the number of phone applications and digital photo software, images of models can be edited to look unrealistically perfect. These images could have negative consequences to those that view them. Therefore, this essay will discuss whether or not the media should include more normal looking people in their advertisements.
The inclusion of average looking people in advertisements would reduce the insecurities feelings customers could have. Customers would not feel inferior and have advertised images that they can relate to. For example, Boo, a women’s clothing brand has ditched supermodels for larger looking women to advertise their clothing. Therefore, this has reduced the inferiority complex feelings that women can have once they see an advertisement with as supermodel.
On the other hand, media should be able to choose whom they desire to be on their advertisement. The media should not be concerned about what people’s opinions and feelings are towards photoshopped supermodels. They should do what is best for their business and not try please everyone. For instance, some fashion brands only hire a specific type of women to advertise their clothing because it fits within their business model. Hence, the media should be able to put up advertisements of whoever they want.
In conclusion, this essay has discussed whether or not more normal people should be included in advertisements. The essay has looked at two main points, the inclusion of average looking people to reduce insecurities and that the media should choose who they want at their own discretion. In my opinion, I believe media should include more average looking, people because it reduces insecurities some people might feel.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.5418719212 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 6.10837438424 278% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 31.9359605911 91% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1207.87684729 122% => OK
No of words: 272.0 242.827586207 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41911764706 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93793019378 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 139.433497537 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540441176471 0.580463131201 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.9 379.143842365 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 6.0 1.56157635468 384% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1538629676 50.4703680194 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.2666666667 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.9669160288 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.25397266985 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 2.91625615764 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0886059939986 0.242375264174 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383304746965 0.0925447433944 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283702424347 0.071462118173 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.059008897809 0.151781067708 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127464973752 0.0609392437508 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 12.6369458128 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.1260098522 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 11.5310837438 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32886699507 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 55.0591133005 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.94827586207 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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