By and large, nowadays, the youth have been playing an integral in societies. So cardinal is their role that all governments is investing a substantial amount of money to educate them efficaciously. It is through having a decent young force that a country could have a satisfactory economic condition. In this case, some controversy arises as to whether or not communities are important for young people. there are many people who hold the view that the young ones do not dedicate sufficient time to their communities. I personally accede to this idea. In what follows, I will delve into two reasons to substantiate my response.
One reason which is worthy to mention is that they are busy with other activities. Thanks to the emergence of new types of entertainment such as video games, young people do not have enough time to help their community owning to the fact that these entertainments usually force them to remain in their house, and therefore, they do not have sufficient time to go out and help their communities. The emergence of social media such as Twitter, Instagram, and Facebook also deteriorate this situation because young people spend an immense amount of their time on these social media. The more amount of time they spend on these activities, the fewer opportunities they have to help others. A recently conducted research, which was carried out by Berlin university, illustrates that more than 40 percent of teenagers spend more than four hours a day on playing online games or wasting their time on social media. This research explicitly shows that these new activities occupy too much of their time.
Another reason which deserves some attention is that there are limited opportunities whereby they can become successful. Inasmuch in modern societies, there is only limited opportunities, young people see other ones as rivals. Consequently, they are not eager (they do not have any propensity) to help one another. Regarding this case, some of them are afraid that by helping, they can provide a situation in which other people will become successful rather than themselves. Take an example of a graduate student into consideration. Having finished his university, He is in pursuit of work. Since there are only limited available work positions, rarely can he convince himself to help other ones to find a satisfactory job. Furthermore, due to the lack of experience, he has lower chances of finding a job than adults whose experience are much higher. Were there more available jobs, they would help other people to find a proper job.
In summary, having gone through the abovementioned in-depth discussions and examples, it is justifiable to conclude that nowadays, young people are not interested in helping their communities. This is because not only are they busy with other activities but also they also have access to the limited number of opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
.... In this case, some controversy arises as to whether or not communities are important for young peo...
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Line 1, column 406, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...unities are important for young people. there are many people who hold the view that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, regarding, so, therefore, as to, in summary, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11181434599 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.877158386 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493670886076 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9875075051 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.958333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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