Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that people who have a realistic view to life, find more opportunity for a successful and happy life than people who just sacrifice good chances for some imaginative aims. Without any doubt, if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather wait for a job that would be more satisfying. There are several supports for this fact, and I am going to mention some of them.
First and foremost, it is a famous notion that maybe this opportunity will be your last chance. People are not able to control all of the events that occur around them. It does not mean that people should spend themselves to destiny, it means human should find their own way, with attention to possibilities and facilities which they have had access to them. Getting a secure job offer even if it was not a perfect job could smooth way and brought about more opportunity which would be more satisfying. The most important thing that people should keep it in their mind is that never forget their main and actual goal, and always try to move toward them.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that a satisfying job is not reachable without starting from a simple position and gaining the required experience and skills. Students after graduation from university have not mainly enough real-world experience to handle complicated works. Thus, it would be necessary for them to begin with a lower-level job even with few salaries, in order to increase their abilities and skills. When looking at the biography of famous and successful people, we can identify that all of them pass through the same way.
Finally, yet importantly, when people just wait and do not involve any jobs, resting and irresponsibility become a habit to them, and they become gradually completely unwilling to have a job. After some years peoples' talent not only will have faded, but also it pushing them toward depression and anxiety, because they feel unuseful for themselves and their family.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that more satisfying. It is because maybe this chance is the last chance, and beginner people first need to obtain some experience, and because of there is a high risk for mental and social problems for unemployed people.
- TPO 46- The opinion of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are older people. 73
- Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games and social networking websites. 73
- TPO 52 3
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. 70
- Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... chance. People are not able to control all of the events that occur around them. It does ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, may, so, thus, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85273159145 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57191024867 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513064133017 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.4437495504 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.6875 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3125 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.563858504112 0.236089414692 239% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185663070241 0.076458572812 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.237755095359 0.0737576698707 322% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.333467477364 0.150856017488 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172487838687 0.0645574589148 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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