Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In our business world, each worker has an especial incoming, which is different between different careers. It is true that income of a famous sport player or a movie actor is far large that the ones of other careers. Some people believe this result is fair while others are against it.
To beginning with, no one can deny effect of celebrities on our life. They bring a wide variety of entertainment to our life. For example, when watching world club we are exiting and some of us are big fan of Messi and other players. Therefore, it seems to fare those players have more incoming at least because of Audiences’ feeling. In addition, these people can play as a sport player or as an actor just for a while. They have to try hard to being succeed during the short while. Thus, it is acceptable that sport professionals receive a large amount of money when they can play in the field before earlier retirement compared to other careers.
On the other hand, some people believe that this difference in incomes is significantly unfair to other professions. For example, teachers, doctors, judges who have a very important careers in each society. A teacher up brings our next generation, a doctor is a person that cure patients, and a judge create rules and defended justice. These entire people do the best thing for people and future of their country. Although, we must notice that, salary of these people paid by the governments. If governments have more budget, obviously salary of these people has will be increased.
To express briefly, in my opinion the huge salary paid to these celebrities is justified because they earning that money from their employers by doing their jobs of entertaining and raising profits for their employers.
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obviously salary of these people has will be increased.
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