The author suggests to invest in a retailer of home heating oil based on the information about home heating convention, climate pattern and houses under construction. However, all these trends cannot justify the author‘s suggestion due to some unwarranted assumptions.
First of all, the author believe that most homes in the northeastern US are still using oil, their typical way, to keep their homes cozy. However, obviously, no matter how long the history of heating by oil is, in an era of various convenient technology, spurning the old way of heating might have been extremely easy and natural for the residents. For instance, there a great possibility that the residents in the area have upgraded their heating apparatus as an alternative of oil furnaces for a better experience, like electric heating machines which have no smell and are easier to controll than burning oil. If that is the case, the author is wrong to assume the oil demand is going to increase, which might actually start to decline.
Furthermore, even if the local residents may be reluctant to change their habits and comsume a lot of heating oil when it's cold, the author assumes that the local climate pattern will be as bitter as expected. Citing the weather forecast for next few years, which the author suggests in winter people are going to endure freezing conditions for as long as 90 days. But simply adducing the weather forecast which usually becomes unreliable in a long term, it is far from convincing. Maybe the temperature could be much higher in next winter as a result of global warming.
Finnaly, even it is granted that the winter is hard to endure in future and they don't need an alternative heating method, the author still implies that there is a direct connection between an increased oil demmand with the profits of Consolidated Industries. Because little information are provided about the heating oil market, we cannot exclude such a possiblity that other retailers are also doing well or even better. Not only its current market share, but also the details about the company's track record remain unknown, which is assumed by the author to be advantegeous and promising. Even if both those newcomers and the others need oil, they might purchase from bettwer retailers instead of Consolidated Industries. And the investiment in Consolidated Industries could be unrewarding.
In sum, when these questions about current heating habits, future weather pattern and profits of the heating oil retailer company are clarified, the suggestion remains unpersuasive.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: For instance, there a great possibility that the residents in the area have upgraded their heating apparatus as an alternative of oil furnaces for a better experience, like electric heating machines which have no smell and are easier to controll than burning oil.
Error: controll Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Furthermore, even if the local residents may be reluctant to change their habits and comsume a lot of heating oil when it's cold, the author assumes that the local climate pattern will be as bitter as expected.
Error: comsume Suggestion: consume
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Finnaly, even it is granted that the winter is hard to endure in future and they don't need an alternative heating method, the author still implies that there is a direct connection between an increased oil demmand with the profits of Consolidated Industries.
Error: demmand Suggestion: demand
Sentence: Because little information are provided about the heating oil market, we cannot exclude such a possiblity that other retailers are also doing well or even better.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: Not only its current market share, but also the details about the company's track record remain unknown, which is assumed by the author to be advantegeous and promising.
Error: advantegeous Suggestion: advantageous
Sentence: Even if both those newcomers and the others need oil, they might purchase from bettwer retailers instead of Consolidated Industries.
Error: bettwer Suggestion: better
Sentence: And the investiment in Consolidated Industries could be unrewarding.
Error: investiment Suggestion: investment
Error: unrewarding Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In sum, when these questions about current heating habits, future weather pattern and profits of the heating oil retailer company are clarified, the suggestion remains unpersuasive.
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2095 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.988 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.633 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.556 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.333 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests investing'.
Suggestion: suggests investing
The author suggests to invest in a retailer of home heating oil based...
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Line 2, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for the residents. For instance, there a great possibility that the residents i...
^^
Line 4, column 82, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...er is hard to endure in future and they dont need an alternative heating method, th...
^^^^
Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dont need an alternative heating method, the author still implies that there is a...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, well, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13365155131 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74229224913 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532219570406 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2308433919 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.4375 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1875 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24652519849 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795476526656 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670007854849 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13635762394 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703671601235 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.