To conmemorate some people or events, people created holidays. At present, people have lots of holidays to celebrate. As far as my concerned, I would like to honor the event of the world peace as holidays, but unluckily, ther are still lots of areas at war or confilicts. All I want to do is let the people of the world know that some of us are luckiy enough to live in a peaceful countries, while others are not. Peolple should united together to make the countries they live in out of the fire of the wars. I will address my views as follows.
To begin with, we should let all of the armies in the world make truce during the holidays. This is the most essential event I want to let people do during the holidays. The war kills and the lives are the cost. Thus this holiday is a perfect time for the people of each side to calm down and talk. Maybe there will be a better solution than the battles.Or someone would say the truce maybe not the way to sovle all of the problems. But the holiday would obviously attract the world's attentions to the regions still at war.
In addtion, the leaders of the world should make speeches to their people. Hence the people of the world would know the signicifance of the peace. As people in my country haven's suffered wars for decades, some of the extremists in my conutry want to solve some foreign issues by armed force. It is the time for them to know the valueless peace is hard to get. Speeches of leaders would remind all of the people to appreciate the peac time and resist wars
Finally, there should be various kinds of events during the holidays. One of them I suggest is the war movie holidays held by different conutries every year. As the movie is one of the most popular arts for people. It is accessible to everyone. Thus during the holidays people of the world could watch lots of war movies. These movies are enlighting and meaningful. The viewers would know more about wars as well as the priceless peace.
In all, I believe the world peace holiday is meaningful and significant to the people of the world. By lots of events , the theme of making the world peace would be spread to every corner of the world. More important, the people at war would see the light of peace by the talk during the truce.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'country'?
Suggestion: country
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ollows. To begin with, we should let all of the armies in the world make truce during t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e war kills and the lives are the cost. Thus this holiday is a perfect time for the ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Or
...l be a better solution than the battles.Or someone would say the truce maybe not t...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ay the truce maybe not the way to sovle all of the problems. But the holiday would obvious...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...d should make speeches to their people. Hence the people of the world would know the ...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...r people. It is accessible to everyone. Thus during the holidays people of the world...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40714285714 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29055732574 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435714285714 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9351198723 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.1923076923 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1538461538 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26923076923 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219221927887 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680270678022 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604716091705 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141277641185 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291305678899 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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