Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt, obtaining good grades in schools is a very great factor for having seccussful children. Earning good grades in schools lead to find good careers in the future with good salaries. Many people contend that offering money to children when they earn good grades is a good idea, while others do not. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to disagree with offering money to children when they obtain good scores in their exams. In the ensuing paragraphs, I dekve into many reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that having good grades is not everything. Children can obtain mediocre grades and still reach to their goals. Also, by offering money to children thay lost their responsibilities. Learning their lessons is their duty during the school period and they have to do their tasks even withot money. So, I think giving money is a very bad idea.
Another point springing to mind is that obtaining good grades and improving their skills are necessary for their future. They have to find jobs and they have to be expert in different fields. There is a possibility that even we stop paying money to children they do not follow their interest or even worse they can abandon their task because they used to get money for every work.
Althouy the said reasons are the first ones cross to the mine, they are not the only reasons possible. There is another subject which must be noticed. The noteworthy statics revealed by a recent study conducted on parents that they offer money to their kids when they earned good grades. This study last 10 years. The study demostrates children that earned no money will be succeed in future. The study was don among 1000 families to avoid any bias.
To sum it all up, by taking all the details into consideration paying money to children is not a good way. This method has bad consequences. For example they lost their responsibility, they abandon their tasks and also they become foolish without any creativity. I hope so oneday we use best methods for breeding skillful and inteligent children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 382, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...en that earned no money will be succeed in future. The study was don among 1000 families ...
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Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'use the best'.
Suggestion: use the best
...out any creativity. I hope so oneday we use best methods for breeding skillful and intel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, still, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84595300261 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50392870072 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522193211488 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5308092815 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3333333333 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9583333333 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387932549181 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106128042464 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678180809631 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228522426431 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508532023827 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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