It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends
Apart from family, friends are an important integral part of our lives. In the journey of life we keep making new friends in addition to our older ones. Personally, I feel old friends are always by our sides, come whatever may, and I have elaborated more on this in the following essay.
To begin with, old friends are no different from family. They are always by your side. Specially when you are far away from your home country , it’s just good close friends that can substitute your family. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I went to New York to pursue my schooling, I was very nervous and anxious. I was a freshman and I felt homesick quite often. I made couple of new friends, but everybody out there was busy in their own lives. I had nobody to share things with or probably go out to make myself feel better, so that I don’t miss home. To my surprise, I had my old school friend from my home country living in the same city now. I was’nt much in touch with her and I just called her to tell her about my feelings in this new place. She came all the way, to my school and took me to her apartment. She took me around the place, made me feel more comfortable to the new city , cooked some traditional food for me, and whenever I felt sick she took me to a doctor as well. All this made me realize that old friends are just the best and no matter what comes they would always be by your side.
Secondly, old friends would always give you true advice. We often get stuck up between choices and don’t know what to do. At the same time many of our friends give us possible solutions, but we don’t know whom to trust and believe. This has happened with me a lot of times, when people give suggestions for their own selfish reasons. One such example is my friend Annie. She has been my best friend since childhood. She was an extremely brilliant student, always excelled in her studies. After her tenth grade, she got an opportunity to work with the school professor for a research paper. This would have been a great oppurtutinty for her. The only thing was she had to take extra time for this research work , and she practiced basketball after classes. Her friends at school convinced her to deny to the professor for the research work , and play basketball with them. Although I advised her to do her research , but she went ahead and refused the professor. Down the line, all the students who helped the professor with the research got an opportunity to visit entire Europe, as a part of their field trip, free of cost. In addition, this experience was added to their profiles and it helped them to get jobs easily with an international experience. This clearly illustrates that your old friends know you and want the best out of you, without any selfish perspective.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is always better to keep your old friends apart from making new ones. Old friends are there by your side as strong as your family, and also guide you always through the right path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 97.0 43.0788530466 225% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48741007194 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40711945913 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471223021583 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9056448215 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.6060606061 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8484848485 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30303030303 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309105812873 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881509167887 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963367759702 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265919839777 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111039328826 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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