Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Increased life span has brought a hot debate that retirement age should be increased or not. Some people advocate setting older ages to become a pensioner. I strongly believe that worker shouldn’t get their pension in older ages because they had already won the retirement right by spending enough time at work and also will not be productive as in younger ages.
In the one hand, expanded life period should not be an excuse for labours to continuing their job. People usually build up their annuity after approximately a 25 year-work life in many countries of the world. After this period of time, they obtain the right to deal with their personal interest such as traveling to other countries or dealing with their hobbies. For instances, a father, breadwinner who worked in a workplace for more than 20 years to serve a good life for his family , should have some times before he died to enjoy his life. If workers have not enough times for themselves after retirement , their whole life become like an imprisonment.
On the other hand, older workers may decrease productivity and cause serious accidents. After an age, the cognitive and physical performance of humans are usually decrease. They become less productive and less energetic. Moreover this may emerge some disasters in workplaces. For example, a bus driver, older than 60 years old, more likely to have a heart attack risk than younger drivers. During a heart attack event, it always jeopardize the life of other passengers. So that employing labours after certain ages might be risky for workers health and also other people.
To sum up, although some people are favor in increasing the retirement ages, parallel to the raised life span, in my opinion, working in older ages is not humanitarian for personal life and harbor some risk for labour and public health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59889514666 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574675324675 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9587103317 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.25 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162222315033 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057800596585 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557296497931 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123091321722 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678587438715 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.