Some people hold that we should spend amount of time and money on the protection of wild animals. Some people argue that they should be spent on human populations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that money should be spent on human needs rather than on animal species’ protection and preservation. In my opinion, both these areas are so crucial that it would certainly impossible to choose one over another.
Money and time should be allowed to spend in the protection of wild animals and endangered species in particular. As stewards of the animal kingdom, we as human have a duty to treat other animals humanely. However, this duty has been usually undermined by the acts of profit-driven and outlaw poachers. Secondly, animals have an important role to play in human survival. Being at the top of the food chain would bring no benefits if all kinds of animal died out since there would be nothing left to serve human purposes of food, entertainment or means of production and so on.
There are many parts of the world where our fellow human is desperately expecting our help. Starvation and famine have taken millions’ lives and there some places where basic sanitation means and medicines are still of a luxury that most people cannot afford. Financial aids should be directed towards these regions rather than the welfare of our more distant relatives. In addition, we are faced with more serious existential issues which climate change brings. Earthquakes, tropical floods and droughts happening in a more frequent basic caused serious damages to the property and human lives. Sending disaster relief to help minimize such disastrous consequences would be a more sensible way forward.
In conclusion, although there are always urgent needs around the world, we can deny our responsibility to other animal species and the importance of them in our lives. It is a job of government to distribute resources and effort more appropriately and effectively.
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- Advantages and disadvantages of overseas studying 78
- Every year several languages die out, some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. Do you agree or disagree? 89
- The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia at present and in future. 73
- Corporal punishment is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 225, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has usually been
...er animals humanely. However, this duty has been usually undermined by the acts of profit-driven...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15068493151 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81874905212 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616438356164 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.744401271 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.266666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209966627257 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689443114802 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100370965802 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125850414406 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815857801241 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.